Postives
- Use of citations to support their text
- integrated their texts effectively (relevancy & grammatically)
- used rhetoric...in their introductions...they had a good enough grasp of the task to create a good read
- Mrs. Douglas has her students start with aphorisms in order to grab the reader's attention
- once the focus established, it was held. The majority of students were able to hold the thought that they were talking about the influences of grandmas
- excellent sentence structure
- impressed with the prewriting...it seemed to help...it was nice to see outlines
- focused on a larger element, in this case characterization
Areas in Need of Improvement
- must show how authors use techniques to characterize...
- need stronger controlling ideas...make sure the connection between both works is obvious in the thesis
- more connection between the technique and element and the controlling idea...for instance...it should be clear how the techniques convey the theme...how do they relate to the thesis, in this case...the controlling idea about the influence of grammy's
- retelling of story...plot summary
- seems to be a great deal of confusion between imagery and symbolism...
- omit Passage I and Passage II, refer to the works by the poem title and the workc title
- essay conclusions seem abrupt...needs to be clear that a conclusion is a conclusion...howsa bout a transition?
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