- Great work using both graph and passage
- good work avoiding plagiarism
- good work citing text and chart in essay
- overall, good job in development
- established purpose very well
- good voice and appropriate tone
- Good attention to your task...most answered both parts of the question completely
In Need of Improvement
- Thesis not fully established or unclear
- quotations misused, cited incorrectly, or information awkwardly integrated into the sentence structure
- quotations not being used to support ideas (usually found in topic sentences)...random facts and tidbits arranged with no apparent purpose...these become lists of facts, which are not connected to any sort of commentary or analysis
- conclusions need some work
- Topic sentence, topic sentence, topic sentence needed. Connect your paragraphs to your thesis
- Transitions needed
- make sure to separate big ideas into paragraphs
- avoid using I
- more of a hook/lead/attention grabber to start introduction (Do not use the task as an intro)
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